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We walked, like a dream
Moving through the night,
disappearing into the day.
There were times when I wanted to cry,
Blotting away the rose-tint rays of hope
That made the dust dance in my line of sight.

We were watching the time pass,
Selecting, stretching out minutes,
Willing them to last.
Laughter that tumbled out hung in the air
Trying to coat us with its glory,
a mosaic of a story of success.

We stopped, to let ourselves be swallowed
By the yawn of life rousing,
All around us.
The thunderstorms that surged in your eyes
Stuck out a gradual finger of electro-light
To strike me, right square in the chest.

We were heightened,
Sensing the dehydration, discontent
alongside the humidity and heat.
Tasting, testing, turning over them
With our tongues, found the taste of rain,
Of yearning, desire lacking satisfaction.

We became, for a moment
I tried to hold the fear that pushed
and tugged at my heart, threatening
To make me flint. If only
I could enclose you in the heart of a flower,
Hold you protected from everything.

I sobbed, each tear a tiny confessional,
A word of honesty. They wavered,
Varied like coloured glass, a maze,
Creating a bigger picture. Cling to me
Like my shadow
. I failed to see
You put your arms around me, and say:
“Love is a funny thing.”
©2004-2009 ~KrazyJellyBean
:iconkrazyjellybean:

Author's Comments

My "mentor" said that he feels my writing is maturing, and I think it might be! This isn't new or that good, but oh well. Bet no-one will guess what it's about as per usual...

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:iconrushy:
Great stuff.
"We were watching the time pass" I love that line.

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Member of :- #britain #DAPensioners .
In vino veritas, nunc est bibendum. - In wine is truth, now we must drink.
:iconkrazyjellybean:
Ah, thank you. No-one will figure out what it's about - surprisingly easy akshully.

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Pleasingly deranged.
:iconmarto:
:O_o: what kind of a nincompoop wouldn't understand it!? I personally think it's about the inner pain of having to see the end of being able to be with someone you loved so much, and still have that vague hope of holding onto that one last moment, thinking it'll stay forever. But then when it's over. you just don't know if you should be happy about you doing so. So then the only thing left for you to do is to dream and yearn of that one moment,..that one kiss, that made you feel...just made you feel. and there goes your title.

:blush: at least taht's the way I view it!

--
"I'll hunt you and the night! "
- Leon Belmont - Castlevania Lament of Innocence
:icongiokun:
Oh shoot O_O

--
Suiton Baby
And the names Gio ^_^d
:iconkrazyjellybean:
Hmmm, it does have elements of that in it... but that's not what it's really supposed to be about. Nice interpretation that, though. Well done!

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Pleasingly deranged.
:iconkrazyjellybean:
Oh shoot? Me confused by that.

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Pleasingly deranged.
:icongiokun:
shit*

=)

--
Suiton Baby
And the names Gio ^_^d
:iconmarto:
:blush: I'm not good at these things to a level that you're at! I'm in beggining :faint:

thank you. I guess I gotta get better though. can you please explain the other view to me? I'm sorry if I'm budding into your personal stuff, but..I'm just very curious. It's something that seems quite deep. It'll be a shame not to get the real meaning to it.

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"I'll hunt you and the night! "
- Leon Belmont - Castlevania Lament of Innocence
:iconkrazyjellybean:
It's actually about a date with my boyfriend. It's about how there are stages, different events in the time we spend together. There are the titght-lipped silences where we can't or don't want to talk, moments of mutual understanding and laughter (Stanza 2), the sad, quiet moments when I realise he's angry with me (S3), moments of sheer lust :blush: (S4), moments where I feel shock at just how in love with him I am (S5), and lastly, moments when I feel the pain that comes with love (S6). :D

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Pleasingly deranged.

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